suppressed
I Saw freedom
tonight
depicted for me
It wasn=t beautiful
It was a man high on drugs alone
In a room
alone
with Junk, Rubbish rotting food & liquid
lights On T. V=s on
simultaneously Different channels
while he typed
his head out over on
ago
He was looking for a distinctly American
dream
Though he wasn=t presented like how
we dream
freedom to be
I Knew he was free
because here in N.Z
There is no dream
There=s what ever I say
In a room alone writing out
over walls on History.
What happened a long time ago.
Hey Tao - cause you mentioned you were in to editing now I thought I would put my 2 cents in in terms of possible edits. I just started hacking. I am not suggesting that my edit is better - just thought you might like to see what my brain makes of it.
ReplyDeletesuppressed
I saw freedom
tonight
a man high on drugs alone
in a room
with junk, rubbish,
rotting food & liquid
lights on, TVs on
different channels simultaneously
he was looking for a distinctly American
dream
but not like how
we dream
freedom to be
I knew he was free
because here in N.Z
there is no dream
there's only whatever I say
in a room alone writing
on walls over history
what happened a long time ago
Love-
D