Criptic Critic Conscience and Known for it

Wednesday, July 29, 2009

freedom depicted. 1999

suppressed

I Saw freedom
tonight
depicted for me

It wasn=t beautiful
It was a man high on drugs alone

In a room
alone
with Junk, Rubbish rotting food & liquid

lights On T. V=s on
simultaneously Different channels
while he typed

his head out over on

ago

He was looking for a distinctly American
dream
Though he wasn=t presented like how
we dream
freedom to be


I Knew he was free

because here in N.Z
There is no dream
There=s what ever I say
In a room alone writing out
over walls on History.
What happened a long time ago.

1 comment:

Dick Whyte said...

Hey Tao - cause you mentioned you were in to editing now I thought I would put my 2 cents in in terms of possible edits. I just started hacking. I am not suggesting that my edit is better - just thought you might like to see what my brain makes of it.


suppressed

I saw freedom
tonight

a man high on drugs alone

in a room
with junk, rubbish,
rotting food & liquid

lights on, TVs on
different channels simultaneously

he was looking for a distinctly American
dream

but not like how
we dream
freedom to be

I knew he was free

because here in N.Z
there is no dream
there's only whatever I say
in a room alone writing
on walls over history
what happened a long time ago


Love-
D